100 wc week 14
There used to be a man at my work and his name was Jim. One day he was stumbling and walked right into a glass door, breaking a lot of the glass. He had some cuts and needed First Aid. He looked like he was in a lot of pain. I got scared as he started screeching and as I was walking out to get some help he screamed " There are monkey`s in here ! " followed by " A monkey pushed my laptop ". I turned to look back and he was going to his cubicle, he looked like he was sleep walking.
Your sentences are much better this week. You have paid more attention to complete sentences with proper punctuation. You are missing a comma after screamed. Next thing to work on is using more powerful language. Keep it up.
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