10 wc week 10
Me and joe were going to get the bank jul the best thing in the bank .''get in the planing room''
I said we planed for a hour ''the bank was shiny''
joe said ''why do I need to know that''
I said. It was 12;00 PM ''its now''
I said joe and I went to the bank ''put your hands up I have a banana''
joe said. I took the jul we went to the house with 100 cops coming. I said ''where shoud we hide the ital.''
later that day joe and I where arrested with a banana.
I said we planed for a hour ''the bank was shiny''
joe said ''why do I need to know that''
I said. It was 12;00 PM ''its now''
I said joe and I went to the bank ''put your hands up I have a banana''
joe said. I took the jul we went to the house with 100 cops coming. I said ''where shoud we hide the ital.''
later that day joe and I where arrested with a banana.
An interesting idea that could be great with some work. Be sure to read your story out loud to your self and to a parent as it will help pick up on areas to work on in your story. You have many repetitive sentence structures which break up the flow of your story.
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